topaz451 wrote:
Oh my god! You spent a lot of time on that. I took the time to read it, and it was pretty good. You should consider making it into a full book. It would sell. Anyways there were a few spelling and punctuation but I doubt you want my critique. It was good though and I thought it was very worth reading. Good Job!
i want anyone's critique for ythe final copy. and to everyone who has read this after i turn it in and get a grade i will post my final version ofthe story as i have made revisions to it.
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